| Date: January 22nd, 2022 7:22 AM Author: ,.,;,;,.;,.;,.;,,,,;,.,; Pooja Makhijani has written a piece for the New York Times about menstruation. Here are a few suggested edits for Makhijani’s piece, free of charge:
First, the sub-head: “Young people want alternatives to disposable tampons and pads — and they’re not embarrassed to talk about it.”
Are “young people” looking for alternatives to disposable menstrual products, or are young women? (Surely the latter since only women menstruate.)
“Still, the average menstruator can use thousands of tampons in their lifetime.”
“Menstruator”? Excuse me, but the word is woman. (Also, “their” should be her.)
“New menstruators often turn to a parent for products and advice. . . .”
Do young women “often turn to a parent for products or advice,” or do they mostly turn to their mothers? (Or do you have a problem with that word, too?)
Here’s a crazy idea: If the story is about young women who aren’t embarrassed to talk about their periods, then perhaps you, the writer, shouldn’t be embarrassed to talk about young women.
https://archive.is/wskQ7 |
Pooja Makhijani, Sapna Palep, Aviana Campello-Palep
